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Drug addiction among veterans is a growing concern in the United States of America.
THIS IS GREAT- BUT YOU COULD MAKE THIS THEY SAY MORE SPECIFIC BY INDICATING WHAT THEY ARE SAYING ABOUT ITS CAUSE. FOR INSTANCE, DOCTORS BELIEVE DRUG ADDICTION IN VETERANS IS A GROWING CONCERN BECAUSE….

This is true because veterans are increasingly getting more addicted to prescription drugs.
GREAT

Veterans have have unlimited access to painkillers through prescriptions, and they are not monitored in administering these drugs leading to addiction.
EXCELLENT

Veterans and doctors are trying to find another method of treating chronic pain instead of prescription opioid painkillers.
I’D LIKE A TRANSITION BEFORE THIS SENTENCE TO INDICATE THE LINK BETWEEN ADMINISTERING DRUGS THAT LEAD TO ADDICTION AND FINDING A METHOD OF TREATMENT.

A lot of veterans are addicted to prescription drugs and that is a major concern among many veterans.
GREAT COMMON IDEA–AGAIN, WHAT IF YOU SPECIFIED WHEN THESE VETERANS BECOME ADDICTED OR WHY IT IS A MAJOR CONCERN?

Doctors and medics treat troops with prescription opiates for the management pains sustained during wartime. Mike said “The troops, if they got hurt they ‘d just shove you with a bag of pills, you never got a bottle and new what was in it; you got a baggie” (as cited in Lawrence,(2014). The bag of pills are prescription painkillers that are available and taken at any time they desire leading to drug dependency and eventually get addicted. EXCELLENT…WHAT WOULD FOLLOW NOW IS YOUR EVALUATION OF THIS ARTICLE’S ATTEMPT TO PROVE THAT THE MILITARY ARE OVERPRESCRIBING ITS VETERANS. THIS COULD COME FROM USING SENTENCES LIKE “TO FURTHER PROVE HIS CLAIM, AUTHOR CITES….” YOU WOULD ALSO WANT TO EVALUATE ITS RELEVANCE AND CREDIBILITY. FINALLY, YOU’D WANT TO CITE WHAT ANOTHER ARTICLE SAYS ABOUT THIS COMMON IDEA TO ENSURE THIS BODY PARAGRAPH IS SYNTHESIZING!

DW